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Wednesday, 4 April 2018

fishing and EASTER

In the weekend we went fishing and my conison court his first fish and he was so happy and he could not stop smiling  and his mum was happy and his dad said that he did not want to hold it but he had to and then that night i was sad because i did not get to go fishing and i had a wee turn but i did not get a fish and then we went home and i saw that there was a dog outside my gate so then i went outside and said go away to the dog and then it was EASTER and i got 8 EASTER EGGS.
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  1. Anonymous4 July 2018 at 11:50

    Hi Kaycee it's Azire from Gilberthorpe school and I like this because it was your cousins first time getting a fish remember the first time i got a fish i was like 5 and it was so big and i was Happy. Did you think about using full stops? anyway bye.

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  2. Anonymous4 July 2018 at 12:44

    hello its Lexi I am in your class I liked it because your cousin caught his first fish.

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  3. Anonymous12 July 2018 at 08:28

    Kia ora Kaycee it is Lacie form your school. Great job on writing this. What cousin caught his first ever fish? Did you think about using fullstops so the readers do not run out of breath?

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